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October 17, 2011

Richard Price On Dialogue

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“Realistic dialogue is interminable and goes nowhere.”

“Good dialogue is about heightened reality, nudging it into a form that doesn’t really exist in the way people talk.”

This is what Richard Price the author of The Breaks (2011), Lush Life (2008), Clockers, Freedomland, The Wanderers and, as a screenwriter episodes of The Color of Money, Sea of Love, HBO’s The Wire.

I totally agree

March 1, 2011

Writing Tip

Filed under: On Writing — carmenferreiroesteban @ 9:34 am
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by Carmen Ferreiro-Esteban


Here is a great tip from Three Seas Agency:

Dialogue is Not Conversation:

There is no room for bad dialogue in a good manuscript. Example:

“Hi, how are you today?”

“I’m fine. How are you?”

“Better today. I was sick yesterday.”

“That’s too bad. I’m glad you’re better.

“I’ve gotta go now. Bye.”


NOTE: The above is conversation, not dialogue.

Dialogue’s only purpose is to move the story along. If it doesn’t, and it sounds like conversation, DELETE IT. Try not to have a character answer a question directly. It’s better to answer a question with a question or to refer to something else.

© 2010 3 Seas Literary Agency

For more tips go to: http://threeseasagency.com/tips/writing-tips

August 16, 2009


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I love stories. That is why I’m a writer. And the story behind Kings, an NBC show that just ended its first season, is one of the best I have seen on TV in a long time.

            It’s the story of David, the shepherd boy who defeated the giant Goliath with a sling. A story most of us know from reading it in the Bible when we were children, but retold in a modern setting.

            Kings takes place in a country called Gilboa (Israel comes to mind) caught in an unending war with its northern neighbor Gath.

            The giant Goliah is a tank. And David is the young farmer turned soldier that blows up the tank in the pilot episode. He also rescues the king’s son and by doing so, is thrown into the web of intrigues of palace life, as he blindly at first, cautiously later, follows the orders of the king he worships. A king blessed by God to Whom he talks through rain and thunder. Until the day David comes. King Silas knows his time is over, but won’t step aside and will eventually defy God Itself to stay in power.

            Not only I find the story brilliant, the dialogue is smart and haunting.

            “We give up what we want when we want power,” King Silas tells his son, chewing the words and then spitting them in a pitch perfect delivery.        

            “The mother of the hero,” he tells David’s Mother.

            “The hero of my son,” David’s mother answers, returning her king’s stare unperturbed,

            “You can have whatever you want,” the king offers David, “even the proverbial half of my kingdom.” Then as the boy’s eyes fall on his daughter, “Half my kingdom it is.”

            There is not a simplistic distinction between good and evil in Kings. All the characters are written as complex human beings, from the wide eyed innocent Shepherd (David’s last name) to the queen’s nephew (a perfectly disturbing Culkin Macaulay of Home Alone fame).

            Kings is a fascinating story of greed and love, and trust and betrayal. It is storytelling at its best.

            If you write, if you want to write, or if you simply love a good story, watch Kings. It is available on line at NBC.com until September 20.

            And if you learn whether Kings has been renewed, please let me know.


Carmen Ferreiro-Esteban